tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3369127277021590195.post7672366227202129278..comments2023-06-09T15:16:38.867+01:00Comments on It Doesn't Have To Be Right...: In Which The Author Does His Verse...Ian Saleshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15375389971610069381noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3369127277021590195.post-50872243452850818162008-11-21T15:48:00.000+00:002008-11-21T15:48:00.000+00:00Hi ian - thanks for sharing (I jumped over from PF...Hi ian - thanks for sharing (I jumped over from PFool) - I liked your piece. But, always a questioner, I wonder if you couldn't make it work better by less exposition. Why "As functional" as opposed to simply "Functional?" etc. I feel like a lot of verbiage could be removed without loss of clarity - and I wonder if the reader couldn't be forced to think/exercise his/her own imagination too. That said, it's a nice shift to the personal perspective in the 2nd part - and I enjoyed it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3369127277021590195.post-18448092807670072482008-11-21T13:23:00.000+00:002008-11-21T13:23:00.000+00:00Ta for the kind words.Ta for the kind words.Ian Saleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15375389971610069381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3369127277021590195.post-84651137349092336932008-11-21T13:15:00.000+00:002008-11-21T13:15:00.000+00:00'ere, now, this is nice, innit? Poetry is a tough...'ere, now, this is nice, innit? Poetry is a tough beat to take on, requiring pinpoint, precision word choice. Why not SF verse? What deserves the poetic approach more than space stations, spinning gas giants, time stretched beyond the eternal? You've approached the task with typical seriousness, tact and smarts. Your effort reads well and articulates its message with brevity and thrilling passages. Luvly stuff...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com